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Post August 25th, 2006, 9:45 pm

I liked the images in both your poems. I did struggle with the rhythm of the first one some - but that could just be me - had to read it a few times to get it flowing.

Liked them both.
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Post September 3rd, 2006, 8:18 am

Poems don't have to rhyme!!! :D

Keep going, practise is the best way to improve (in all things); at the end of the day you are writing for yourself to express your thoughts, feelings, emotions so really it is immaterial what anyone else thinks.
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Post November 28th, 2006, 7:39 pm

lifemates...what a sweet thought provoking word
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Post November 29th, 2006, 11:36 pm

There are wonderful poems here, if it's a help I found playing music while I write an aid, but music to fit the mood in which you find yourself writing, it can kinda give you a rhythm.Look for words that don't necessarily rhyme but maybe have a same resonance in your head as I always recite back in my head with a John Hurt (actor) voice.Sometimes even cutting out alot of words to reduce a poem to maybe four or five words a line effective.It still is a wonderful learning thing for me so rhyme or no does'nt matter just get that beat ion your head and off ya go :D
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